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Post by Animalfire0 on 2015-05-11, 01:45

Hi Uranium Team and others,

I'm sure there are lots of posts like this already under this category for minor mistakes or tweaks, but I figured I'd put mine here and add to them as I notice them. Feel free to join in!

There's a spelling error when you speak to the nurse at the alternative breeding center to receive your lucky egg; she says "costumers" instead of "customers".

Also, it'd be nice if the pronouns could be altered for NPC's when you choose the female character; for instance, the Ferryman that takes you back and forth from Bealbeach to Venesi refers to my lady character as "sir".
Additionally, the Ferryman speaks in a run-on sentence after the first sentence. The speech should read: "Hello, sir (madam)! I sail this boat constantly between Venesi City and Bealbeach City. If you want, I can get you to Bealbeach right now, but don't worry, I won't forget you there. If you wish to get back to Venesi after spending your time in(on?) those great beaches, I'll be waiting for you."
Also, he should say "I'll be here when you're ready" instead of "I'll be here whenever you get ready".

Thanks! Sorry for nitpicking, I just thought you guys would like to know so you can make your game as professional as possible! Cheers!
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Re: Just a couple mistakes/suggested tweaks

Post by LoverIan on 2015-05-11, 04:44

I think the introductory could be fixed as

"Hello Sir (Madam)! I sail this boat constantly between Venisi City and Bealbeach City. If you want I can take you to Bealbeach now, but don't worry I won't forget you there. If you wish to get back to Venesi I'll be ready."

The introductory is still important, but you have a good point. I noticed that when watching a Let's Play.
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Post by WubbaG on 2015-05-11, 10:23

BTW its a train not a boat
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Re: Just a couple mistakes/suggested tweaks

Post by sovest555 on 2015-05-11, 11:26

WubbaG wrote:BTW its a train not a boat

Between Bealbeach and Venesi, that is a boat. The train is from Bealbeach to other parts of West Tandor.

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Re: Just a couple mistakes/suggested tweaks

Post by WubbaG on 2015-05-11, 12:11

Is there a boat? I never could go on it!
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Re: Just a couple mistakes/suggested tweaks

Post by masterofbalance74 on 2015-05-11, 12:58

Why not have it as "Hello Trainer! I sail this boat constantly between Venisi City and Bealbeach City. If you want I can take you to Bealbeach now, but don't worry I won't forget you there. I can take you back to Venesi when you are finished relaxing on those beaches" The word trainer can be a gender neutral term which would make the whole thing easier, in my last experience with rpg maker it was kind of annoying to get everything npc to distinguish genders.

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Post by Xephiel on 2015-05-11, 13:00

you have to be in venisi to get to bealbeach then he will take you back when you are done there
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Re: Just a couple mistakes/suggested tweaks

Post by sovest555 on 2015-05-11, 13:11

masterofbalance74 wrote:Why not have it as "Hello Trainer! I sail this boat constantly between Venisi City and Bealbeach City. If you want I can take you to Bealbeach now, but don't worry I won't forget you there. I can take you back to Venesi when you are finished relaxing on those beaches" The word trainer can be a gender neutral term which would make the whole thing easier, in my last experience with rpg maker it was kind of annoying to get everything npc to distinguish genders.

Having something gender-neutral might be a good idea in this case. Perhaps this will be considered for the next patch.

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